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The media should limit how much bad news they report because it discourage people from doing activitis which usually involve very little risk To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Radio, TV and the Internet have to reduce the bad
information
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 they tell
people
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 because they could make them disappointed to do normal activities. In general, most
news
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 which is heard in hole-
world
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 contains important happened that
people
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 want to know. While
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 desiring to know new data cause media make attempt to publish sometimes masked
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.
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,
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information
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 will able to affect on crowd's life but they should reckon because if they concealed data from society, freedom might be impacted. So,
news
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 should be available to every person in the
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however
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 they have bad effects.
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, a great deal of importance is
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 can prepare pupils for bad situations.
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, when two or more governments had conflicts in an area of the
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,
people
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 could follow the
news
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 to find the best way to save themselves.
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, the presence to had
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 could be disappointed and make a man unhappy. In fact, following
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 may cause
people
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 will not able to make decisions.
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, terrible
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 about real estate can cause a man will not to purchase a suitable house.
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,
people
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 should find the best way to use
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.
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, most of us are used to hearing
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 without any reactions unless they are attractive to us. But doing so is numerously becoming increase over 20 years and it would be perilous in future. In conclusion, it seems in the future
world
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 if we want it or not,
people
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 hear a considerable amount of bad
news
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. whereas we are
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 to find a good way to use them. Because the
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 with free
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 is far better than a
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 without it.
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