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International travel is becoming coming cheaper, and countries are opening their doors to more and more tourists. Do the advantages of increased tourism outweigh disadvantages?

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2. travel is cheaper to get back the loss during the pandemic..
countries
 as well will
benifit
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benefit
 to introduce to
traveler
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travelers
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 their products and boost their
tourism
 industry. summary.. airlines offers
low cost
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 flight as well
diiferent
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different
countries
 will have
benifits
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benefits
sucj
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such
 as boosting their
economy
revenue
. disadvantages....no
tourism
..
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etc
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 onomy
revenue
plkummeted
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plummeted
.. no chance for
tourism
 industry growth.
Travelers
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enthusiast
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 are taking
advantages
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 to explore different
countries
 because of
low cost
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 expenses as well as numerous
nation
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nations
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 are giving
opportunity
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 in welcoming massive tourists. I do
believed
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 that
merits
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 of
elevated
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 number of
tourism
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tourists
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 outweigh its drawbacks. I will explain my opinion in the ensuing paragraph. On the one hand, the vast majority of
aviation
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 industry offers
cheapest
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 airfare for them to pull back the plummeted status of their company; numerous nation
are
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 widely
open
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 their doors to entice visitors from different parts of the globe. The reason for
this
 is to recover the loss of
economy
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revenue
 due to the pandemic that have had
occured
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occurred
.
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, in Korea, the government promotes
manifold
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 of tourist spots
destination
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destinations
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 to attract people in exploring excellent areas in
such
 a way they could obtain high
economy
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 income tax return that will tremendously help their country.
Thus
, advantages... airfare cheaper and other
countries
 opening door more and more other
countries
... 1. cheaper because airlines want to have more income...
countries
 open door to
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the traveler
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traveler
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traveller
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.
way
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a way
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 for
other country
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another country
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 to boost their income tax return that will help
boosting
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 their
economy
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revenue
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