Some people say that popular TV entertainment programs should aim to educate viewers about some social issues. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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social problems. In
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with
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awarness
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awareness
about family planning and helps to curb the
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deadly
diseases.
First
of all, entertainment shows
brings
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the
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awareness among the
people
regarding family planning.
This
is because
majority
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of the
people
watch TV to enjoy their favourite shows. If
such
shows will focus on the issues
such
as family planning,
people
will
undertsand
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understand
more and adopt
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methods which they do not understand
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otherwise
.
As a result
, it will lead to
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the issue of
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a growing
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population
.
For instance
, in china
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popular
shows
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national
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the national
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channel
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channels
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foccused
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focused
more on the issue of expanding
population
.
Such
shows proved
successfull
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successful
and brought
a
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population
of china in control by making citizens more
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responsible
responsive
and adopting a single child policy.
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, famous leisure shows on television
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a crucial role in addressing
the
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social issues.
Additionally
, these days healths disorders related to tobacco
cunsumption
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consumption
such
as oral
cancer
are on
surge
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. The
goverment
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government
should telecast shows related to
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the spread
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spread
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of
cancer
and
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its
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the implication
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implication
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implications
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,
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so that it will deter
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smokers from smoking and it will decline the rate of oral
cancer
.
For example
in India, most
of
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the famous dramas and movies
spreads
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spread
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educational awareness regarding
the
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cancer
by displaying the
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message
"quit smoking before
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too late".
As a result
,
people
think's
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twice before smoking.
Thus
, telecasting
such
educational shows will address the
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prevalence
of
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disorders in society. In conclusion, I strongly agree that
televison
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television
shows should educate the citizens regarding social problems. Not only it does help to control the
population
explosion, but it
also
does improve the
quaility
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quality
of life among the individual.
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