Task 2 Young people are much more aware of and concerned about issues like the environment, poverty, and animal welfare than previous generations. what is your own opinion?
The younger generation in today's world is more engaged and well-informed about global issues than their counterparts in the past. I believe the said statement is true as many young people are involved in
such
matters especially
about the issues related to the environment, poverty, animal welfare and equality.
Today everything is more globalized and closer thanks to the internet and technology. Everyone has access to everything with a matter of a few button clicks from anywhere. Add the comma(s)
, especially
Hence
kids are aware of what is happening around the world, unlike in the past. Moreover
, they can witness the consequences of such
matters. For example
, if we take the war happening in Gaza, everybody knows what is happening and everyone gets to see the videos and witness how people are suffering by using technology and social media. On the contrary
, older people in those days only heard such
through newspapers and I believe they are indeed inadequate to make a difference or feel on a personal level.
Apart from
this
another major reason for the youth to be more involved is because, with the technological advancement and social media, anyone can support and share knowledge on a global level. For instance
, any human being can actively join in rescuing endangered penguines
living in the Arctic. Correct your spelling
penguins
penguin
Hence
the ability to be a part of the solution, even virtually, creates the platform and encourages kids to involve
more and more in Wrong verb form
be involved
such
behaviors.
In conclusion, with the current technological development and social media, the world has become smaller and closer. Hence
every problem has been everyone’s problem and easy access to resources has resulted in youth being more aware and concerned than the past generations.Submitted by hashkweerasekara on
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task achievement
Ensure that your ideas are consistently backed by clear and specific examples. For instance, when mentioning that young people are more aware of environmental issues, provide specific instances, such as youth-led climate change movements like Fridays for Future.
coherence cohesion
Work on the logical flow between your ideas. Each paragraph should have a clear topic sentence, and the arguments within should follow logically from one another. Be cautious of repetition and ensure every sentence contributes to your argument.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are well-structured and effectively highlight the main argument of the essay.
task achievement
You have thoughtfully addressed the task, providing a clear stance on the issue and supporting your viewpoint.