Beside a lot of advantages, some people believe that the Internet creates many problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
There is currently a contentious argument over whether
internet
is harmful and Add an article
the internet
cause
many problems Correct subject-verb agreement
causes
on
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for
people
. Although
I accept that using the internet
harbors
some positive implications Change the spelling
harbours
on
human beings, I mostly believe that Change preposition
for
internet’s
negative sides Correct article usage
the internet’s
is
high than Change the verb form
are
positive
sides.
The main reason why I believe communication problems each other Correct article usage
the positive
people
are created by the internet
. Spending time on the internet
decrease social life and weakness bond
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in bond
family
relatives. Change preposition
in family
For example
, in the past, when people
came to work, they spent time family
, Change preposition
with family
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and friends
friends
and went to Add the comma(s)
,friends
theatre
, Correct article usage
the theatre
cinema
and they socialized with each other. Nowadays Correct word choice
and cinema
the
most Correct article usage
apply
of
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apply
the
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apply
people
prefer surfing on
the Change preposition
apply
internet
in their spare time and watching Add an article
a movie
movie
on Fix the agreement mistake
movies
the
Netflix, Correct article usage
apply
theatre
on Fix the agreement mistake
theatres
the
YouTube and so on. Correct article usage
apply
In addition
, if people
want to speak,
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to, see
see
each other, they do not meet. Only they talk via Correct word choice
and see
on
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apply
the
skype, YouTube and so on.
Another reason why I support the notion that Correct article usage
apply
people
are being impacted negatively is that
increasing depression rate. Correct determiner usage
the
People
camouflage truth
in their life and show everything is ideal on Correct article usage
the truth
the
social account. Change the word
their
This
lies Correct pronoun usage
These
cause
depression Correct subject-verb agreement
causes
Change preposition
in the
the
minority of the Correct article usage
a
people
. Furthermore
, many apps on the internet
creates
Change the verb form
create
propensity
Correct article usage
a propensity
of
the expense Change preposition
for
money
. Change preposition
of money
For instance
, many games which
have Correct pronoun usage
apply
month
Replace the word
monthly
subscription
. Fix the agreement mistake
subscriptions
However
, there are useful apps that help to cultivate language and digital skills at a reasonable price. If people
want to obtain these skills in the offline course, they spend more money than online apps.
In conclusion, I hold the view that internet
Correct article usage
the internet
generate
serious problems Change the verb form
generates
on
society and Change preposition
in
Correct article usage
the intelligent
intelligent
level is might Replace the word
intelligence
decreased
by the Change the verb form
decrease
be decreased
internet
and problem solve
not only Add a hyphen
problem-solve
the
individual but Change preposition
for the
also
the the
state.Remove the redundancy
apply
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