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Most people believe that the model of the EU is the future, with countries gradually joining together into larger units. Write an essay expressing your opinion about this topic and support it with arguments including: • lower taxes and prices associated with being part of a free-trade area; • ability to travel freely between countries to live or work; • how countries modernise and influence one another when they join together. (Word limit: 200-220 words)

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Most people nowadays believe that the model of the EU
is
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in
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 the
future
, with
countries
 gradually joining together into larger units.
To begin
with
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 I
also
 think that Europe is
great
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a great
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 place and the
future
 is bright. As a citizen
in
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of
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 Bulgaria which is part of Europe, I would like
in
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apply
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the
future
 the politics can make a stable infrastructure so that we do not need to pay
such
 a large amount of taxes.
Also
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 the
supplying
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 between EU
countries
 should not be that expensive and with that
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,
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the products will drop in price.
Secondly
, I think that every citizen
in
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 the
boarders
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borders
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 of the EU should travel freely between
countries
 to live or work. Because nowadays people wait and lose so much time on borders. I think that travelling between
countries
 should be under some sort of control of course but we need to improve the system to be more time
eficient
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efficient
.
Furthermore
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countries
 can modernise and influence each other by joining together. So that the bigger
countries
 can help the smaller ones grow and improve faster. I think that conflicts should not split
countries
 apart and if they join together,they will be stronger and healthier for the economy. In
conclusion
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countries
 joining and being part of large units is a great idea in my opinion and
this
 way
countries
 can improve and have a better
future
.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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