What do you think about the process of manufacturing process for producing sugar from sugar cane.

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illustrate
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manufacturing
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the manufacturing
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process for producing
sugar
from
sugar
cane. There are seven steps for making the
sugar
, which
is
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start
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to start
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growing until drying and cooling. The
first
step
is
growng
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growing
sugar
cane
during
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from
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12 until 18 months. After that enter harvesting
step
, can do
by
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in
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two ways, both the traditional model cutting or
use
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using
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machine
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the machine
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with
tractor
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a tractor
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.
The
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next
step
,
sugar
cane is
crushing
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crushed
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and the result is
juice
. And
then
juice
pull
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pulls
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in purifying
juice
step
in the fourth
step
. In
this
step
,
juice
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the juice
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will enter
in
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apply
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limestone filler. Continue from
this
step
,
juice
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the juice
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will
becomes
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syirup
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syrup
by heat process in the evaporator
step
.
Then
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,
sixth
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the sixth
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step
is
centrifuge
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a centrifuge
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, which is separated
sugar
crystals from
syrup
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the syrup
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. So, the
last
step
is drying and cooling.
Sugar
like
a crystals
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crystals
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will enter in drying and cooling. After it has been dry and cool, people can consume the
sugar
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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