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As a part of education, students should spend a period of time living in another country to learn its language and culture. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is a controversial perspective heating up a debate
whether
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students
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 should spend their
time
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 settling down in another country to learn its language and
culture
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. In my opinion, I would not consider myself an advocate of
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 idea. Without a shadow of a doubt, studying overseas is one of the best choices and brings a lot of benefits to
students
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. Because
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 not only obtain knowledge about other nations
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 but
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 experience a bunch of
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culture
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 and are made up of independence.
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,
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Montreal
 in Canada is famous for the film industry
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that
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 is not ubiquitous in Vietnam, so there are a lot of families that allow their children who have
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 passion to learn there.
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time
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 to study in another country to learn language and
culture
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,
students
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 learn a lot of knowledge that they can not have in their country. While the redeeming features of the pros of studying abroad are widely acknowledged, there are still a bunch of difficulties when
students
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 spare their
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 arising in other nations. One of the challenges is financial problems, which determine most of the
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students’
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study
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to study
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 overseas. Because it is not only for accommodation, flight or meals, but
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 people have to pay tuition fees that can reach some billions in 1,2 years. What’s more,
students
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also
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 feel
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culture
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by culture
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 due to having a huge distinct
culture
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.
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, while a thumbs up in other countries like the US means good,
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in
Iran
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 it is considered insulting and swearing at someone.
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, living in another nation to learn
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 brings a formidable negative impact on
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' lives. In conclusion,
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 there are considerable reasons to pin down why people choose to study abroad as a part of education, I would contend that it is not necessary to have spent
time
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 settling down in other nations to learn languages and cultures.
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