Some people say patriotism causes problems and is negative overall. Others feel that it is beneficial for society at large. Do the advantages of patriotism outweigh its disadvantages?

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THE IMPORTANCE OF
PATRIOTISM
IN EVERYONE'S LIFE CAN'
T
BE EXPLAINED.IT HAS NOW BECOME MORE CONTROVERSIAL CLAIMING THAT IT IS BENEFICIAL FOR THE COUNTRY WHILE OTHERS ARE IN UNFAVOUR OF
THIS
. IN MY VIEWPOINT , IT IS A GOOD DEED TO SERVE OUR NATION. IT WILL
FURTHER
ELABORATE WITH SOME EXAMPLES IN THE FOLLOWING PARAGRAPHS. THE
FIRST
AND FOREMOST ,PATRIOTIC FEELINGS GROW INSIDE ,IT GIVES US A CHANCE TO SERVE OUR NATION WITHOUT ANY HESITATION ,WITH FULL OF ENTHUSIASM .
SECONDLY
,IT MAKES US BRAVE .
FOR INSTANCE
,WHEN A ARMY MAN FIGHTS AGAINST THE ENEMY THEY NEVER THINK ABOUT THEIR LIVES EVEN NOT ABOUT FAMILY .IT'S SO THAT HOW BRAVE HE IS! WHO CAN SACRIFICE THEIR LIFE FOR THE NATION.
MOREOVER
. ONLY BECAUSE OF OUR PATRIOTIC ARMY WE CAN SLEEP WELL IN OUR HOUSES . SO WE SHOULD NEVER UNDERESTIMATE THE POWER OF
PATRIOTISM
. EVERY COIN HAS TWO SIDES ,WE CAN'
T
NEGLECT THAT
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WHEN THEY SACRIFICE THEIR LIVES NOT ONLY DO THEY SUFFER WHILE THEY FIGHT WITH OTHERS BUT THEIR FAMILY MEMBERS
ALSO
SUFFER.
FOR INSTANCE
,IN 2018 VEER KARAN SING DIED DUE TO THE SLOPE OF ICE AT THE AVALANCHE RESCUE TEAM COULD FIND HIM AFTER 15 DAYS OF MISHAPPENING .
HOWEVER
,AFTER HOSPITALIZING ,HE COULDN'
T
SURVIVE MORE THAN 5 DAYS AND HE DIED.HE WAS JUST MARRIED .WE CAN'
T
FEEL THE PAIN OF HIS WIFE ,MOTHER AND OTHER FAMILY MEMBERS . TO RECAPITULATE ,
PATRIOTISM
IS NOT EASY .SO WHO ARE DOING RESPECT THEM AND THEIR FAMILIES . WITHOUT THEM WE CANT FEEL SAFE AT HOME .THERE AS MANY PROBLEMS AND NEGATIVE EFFECTS BUT THE FEELING OF
PATRIOTISM
IS UNBEATABLE . I EXPLAINED THE ALL POINTS IN THE A FOREMOST PARAGRAPH WELL .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fosters
  • sense of belonging
  • strengthening societal bonds
  • instills
  • pride and loyalty
  • excessive
  • nationalism
  • intolerance
  • discrimination
  • conflict
  • blind allegiance
  • flawed policies
  • unifying force
  • crisis
  • manipulated
  • political leaders
  • division
  • advocating
  • responsibility
  • civic duty
  • engaged
  • informed citizenship
  • balanced and inclusive
  • cultural diversity
  • marginalize
  • minority groups
  • stifle dissent
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