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Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born. What might be the reasons for this? What are the advantages and disadvantages?

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It is more common to see many
people
 not leaving their hometown and choosing to live close to the place they were born, and economical factors play an important role in
this
 matter.
Although
 there are some advantages to staying close to one’s hometown, there are some disadvantages as well. Many
people
 are reluctant to move to a new city for living after their graduation these days, and
this
 may be because they simply can’t afford the costs of moving and starting a new life somewhere else. With the current economic situation, it’s not so surprising to see
people
 staying near where they have been born. There are some advantages to
this
 matter.
Firstly
, support can be received from family members in times of need which can be anywhere from getting help with a newborn to receiving care in times of sickness. Another advantage would be not having to face problems in getting familiar with a new place. Even if
people
 move to a city within their own country, they will still be faced with difficult situations which might be intimidating. Not knowing
who
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 to turn to when a pipe breaks, or
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 to call in case of an emergency can easily be avoided by not moving.
However
,
this
 situation might make
people
 feel bored and out of tune with their own lives after a period of time, especially if they live in a small town. Only being able to go to one bar or shop from only one store will soon get dull.
Moreover
, gaining experiences is something that
people
 will miss out on by not having lived in different places. Considering today’s economic situation, it is normal to see
people
 choosing to live close to their hometown. Even with some disadvantages, I think there are more benefits to living in the same city as you were born.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Familiarity
  • Comfort
  • Social ties
  • Family ties
  • Belonging
  • Resources
  • Opportunities
  • Fear
  • Unknown
  • Financial constraints
  • Cultural attachment
  • Language barriers
  • Limited education
  • Skills
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