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An increasing number of people are now using the internet to meet new people and socialise. Some people think that this has brought people closer together while other thinks people are becoming more isolated. Discuss both views and give you opinion.

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For years, meeting
people
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 in person had been considered
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the only means of socializing, but recently the internet and online applications made a revolution in
humans
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' interactions. While some
people
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 argue that
humans
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 are getting closer compared to the past, others are looking at
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 phenomenon as a problem making mankind isolated. I believe
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modern interaction has made
people
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 alone. The following essay will overlook both views which are proceeding with my opinion. On one hand,
people
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 are not
limitted
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limited
 to their neighbours and neighbourhood
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anymore
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 and the global village is becoming plausible with the help of online platforms. The young generation is choosing their
friends
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 from all over the world and even can visit different places together virtually.
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, Metaverse provides a platform that made it possible for teenagers from different countries to gather virtually
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 a party and socialise.
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,
people
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 are not constrained to countries' borders and can widen the circle of their
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to
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 the world which, leads to bringing different nationalities closer together.
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, these platforms are enticing
people
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 to spend hours alone in a room communicating with
friends
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 who can not be touched and
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perceived
believed
 as real ones.
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, a growing number of teenagers are missing the dinner time,
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 they can spend with their families, using their computers alone.
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 leads to
formation
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the formation
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 of a community
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 prefers staying in their comfort zones rather than going out with their actual
friends
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.
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, mankind is transforming from a sociable creature to an isolated one. Despite
people
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 being able to find more
friends
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, if you take a step back and look at
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 phenomenon again, I believe you will find an alone human with a lot of fake
friends
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. To sum up, the internet and available platforms have resulted in
people
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 becoming closer to more
humans
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 around the world.
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, they are spending more time alone using online applications to communicate with those
numerouse
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numerous
friends
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. I believe that
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 has contributed to an isolated generation who are fooling themselves
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 the number of
humans
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 they know.
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