An increasing number of people are now using the internet to meet new people and socialise. Some people think that this has brought people closer together while other things people are becoming more isolated. Discuss both views and give you opinion.

Modern technology enjoys having been incorporated into daily habits.
Moreover
, social
media
applications
such
as Facebook, Twitter, and Messenger are
vital
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role
at
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in
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present
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generation
into
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in
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meeting new
people
and
interact
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interacting
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with
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themwith
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.
Similarly
, having claimed to brought
people
in close contact,
while
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others have become isolated. In my opinion, social
media
has a massive impact
in
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on
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the
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society because
interaction
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the interaction
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is easily attainable
with
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within
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different time
frame
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frames
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, whereas
it's
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its
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negative impact makes
people
to
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apply
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limit face-to-face conversation. The internet
social
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and social
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media
provides the society closer together
; and
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, and
;
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a possibility to have connected with new
people
all over the world.
In addition
, having everyday
conversation
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conversations
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with several
people
produces light mode
especially
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to
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for
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individuals with
same
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the same
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interest
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interests
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and
passion
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passions
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. Friendship is gain to have obtained even though they only meet thru
website
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the website
a website
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.
For example
, I have
meet
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met
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several of my friends thru twitter
although
we have not
meet
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met
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in person, and because we
breath
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breathe
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the same content like
same
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the same
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celebrities
idolizes
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our conversation takes hours and hours.
On the other hand
,
the
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social
media
has
negative
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a negative
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side because it limits
the
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apply
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society's face-to-face interaction. Most
of
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apply
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the
people
are occupied about having in-front of the gadgets all the time, and the value of
direct
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a direct
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contract becomes less important.
Furthermore
, it can develop into self-isolation that can affect the
persons
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person's
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way of thinking
with
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about
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other
people
.
For instance
, at some point in my life, I developed a lack of confidence to talk with other
people
in person because I felt they may judge me. In conclusion, the internet makes waves to have constructed in peoples interaction, which created easy access in different time zone and places,
however
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,however
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it provides direct communication less important.
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