In education and employment, some people work harder than others. Why do some people work harder? Is it always a good thing to work harder
Hard
work
pays off is a renowned proverb which means one
who works harder than others never fails. Even if they do not succeed, they get lessons. This
is also
the same for education and employment. Some people
work
harder than others because they want to succeed and even if they don’t, they won't regret.And I believe working harder is a quality everyone should have.
Some people
do work
hardly and precisely either in education or employment. This
type of people
have clear goal in their lives. As for education aspect, student with a purpose of becoming something will try harder than others who don't. For instance
, a student who wants to become a doctor, will try to get high marks from young age. This
is also
the same in work
places too. Hard working employee will finish the assignments early contributing to the company's growth.
Moreover
, hard working is a good thing as it is a quality of a person. In this
job competitive era, hard working is a plus point for employment. As for example
, a company is recruiting for a position and there are two people
with same educational background and experience, the one
whose previous employer recommended for hard working will get a job then
the other. Not every hard working person is successful but success only comes with the hard work
.
To conclude
, hard working people
always have a purpose to accomplish in their lives. And working hard is important quality one
should have. With this
, one
can be successful in every work
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