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Most people believe that the model of the EU is the future, with countries gradually joining together into larger units. Write an essay expressing your opinion about this topic and support it with arguments including: • lower taxes and prices associated with being part of a free-trade area; • ability to travel freely between countries to live or work; • how countries modernise and influence one another when they join together. (Word limit: 200-220 words)

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Is there a model of a perfect life? A large number of people believe that the ways of the EU are the future. I personally believe that the joining of the countries together into larger units is going to lead to
a positive changes
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 for all of us.
To begin
 with, trading is part of the life of every country. Seeling and shopping gas, fuels, cars, foods and materials for the companies
is
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are
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 connected with taxes.
However
, being part of a free-trade area means lower prices and higher income.
Furthermore
, almost every human loves travelling. Going from
country
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one country
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 to another, from
city
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one city
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 to another is easier and more comfortable when the countries are in a unit. A lot of people,
for example
, seek their dreams somewhere else away from their birth lands.
Lastly
, people learn one from another
and
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which
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 could influence their way of living.
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, Pencho Slaveikov modernised
the
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apply
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Bulgarian literature after coming back from Germany. To sum up, I think that there is not anything scary
in
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about
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 joining together. Helping each other is important so we could grow up.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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