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You have a complaint about the hotel you stayed at while attending a meeting that was booked by the organiser of a company meeting. Write a letter to the organiser of the meeting and include • Details about the meeting • The problem you face • What should be done

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Dear
Mr.
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 James ,
This
 is Mee Mee , an assistant manager from the Finance department , and I am writing
this
 letter to complain about
inconveniences
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 that I encountered during the company meeting which you organized. As you know , the virtual meeting was very crucial to us because our global CEO and regional director joined via
the
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Skype to discuss the
next
year
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 project plan . Since everything has relied on the allotted funding , I thoroughly prepared to propose
the
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 detailed plan. Regarding problems , the internet connection was the
first
 concern . Due to the unstable network , our important attendants could not hear clearly.
Moreover
 , as the power was an outage once per two hours , I requested the hotel to run the generator , but , they did not take any action . Ultimately , our important meeting was sadly postponed to the
next
 month.
Accordingly
 , I would like to suggest
you
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that before you book the hotel , you had better negotiate necessary amenities in advance . And ,I suppose you should ask for any compensation
such
 as offering free of charge
on
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 the upcoming meeting. I hope you will take immediate action on that matter. Yours faithfully, Mee Mee
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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