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The charts below give information on the ages of populations of Yemen and Italy in 200 and projecting for 2050.

The charts below give information on the ages of populations of Yemen and Italy in 200 and projecting for 2050.
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The charts below show the differences in
growth
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the growth
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 of the
population
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 between
Yemen
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 and Italy,
according to
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 ages from 2000 to the
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 50
years
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. In 2000
Yemen
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 have a small percentage of 3.6% of 60+
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 old, a moderated
population
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 of 46.3% of 15-59
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 old and a higher percentage of 50.1% of young people ages 0-14
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 old.
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, in 2000 Italy have a remarkable difference in percentages of
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 per age
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 with
Yemen
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, 24.1% of 60+
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 old, 61.6% of 15-59
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 old and 14.3% of 0-14
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 old. In
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 chart is clear that Italy's
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 of 65 plus have a huge jump, going from 24.1% in 2000 to 42.2% in the
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 50
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, compared with
Yemen
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's
population
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 of 60 plus increasing from 3.6% to 5.7% in the same period. In ,conclusion the chart below shows that
Yemen
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 will not have a massive change in
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 percentages per age in the coming 50
years
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 compared with Italy's
population
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 which will have a significant change of nearly double the
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 in their
60 plus
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years
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 old.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, yemen, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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