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Do good exam results at school ir college guarantee success in life?Discuss do you believe that studying hard will bring a better life?

#exam #results #school #ir #college #guarantee #success #life
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education
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 a vital
rol
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role
 in folk's
life
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 and futures,while,there are
people
 who oppose studying hard and they do not believe that
education
related
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 to
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future
futur
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,unlike me.Both merits and demerits will be
ellobrated
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celebrated
elaborated
on
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this
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Although
,
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I do not completely
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believe
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belive
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believe
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 that academic achievement equates
with
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 a successful
life
,there are some positive and important footprints.study and university
education
 help humans to broaden
ther
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their
the
 mind horizons
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so that they can learn new things about
world
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 and update themselves.
Moreover
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 they are neither backward in
life
 nor lack qualifications.
In
addition
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 they have information about the essential things of
life
.Another benefit has to do with they can find a
job
 easily.
People
 who have
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a degree
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degree
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 and
well-skilled
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 can find a
job
 related to their major easier than folks who do not have abilities or
knowledges
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knowledge
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.
Excessive
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 study has disadvantages that are being investigated,not only
it
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makes
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people
 distance from society but
also
 causes
the
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unemployment folks.Due to lack of skill and ability if
the
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they
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 do not have
degree
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a degree
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 they cannot
finde
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find
 a suitable
job
.
Moreover
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job
 satisfaction and better lifestyle compared with
people
 who lack qualifications.On the other
downside
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 they can
aslo
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also
 have stress and responsibility. To wrap up what mentioned above,the merits of
education
 outweigh its negative foodprints
aslo
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also
 in my impression study is very essential for humans
especially
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 in the age of technology.Well-educated and well-qualified
people
 have more opportunities in
workplace
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the workplace
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 and
society
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in society
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