Some people feel that boarding school (where students or pupils live at the school during the term) are an excellent option for children, while other people disagree for a number of reasons.

It is probably said that
students
have
benefit
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,
which
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they
study
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and
live when
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living
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during
school
term
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terms
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at the boarding
school
.
However
, some people think that
this
view is not useful for
pupil
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pupils
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and
parents
.
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essay will debate
to
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two
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side
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sides
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and give a conclusion.
On the other hand
, some
parents
think that their
children
study
in
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abroad when their
children
will
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struggle and use drugs. Because,
children
are always in focus
their
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parents
, which means they do not know about how to spend money and how to manage their
time
. Another important reason is
short
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the short
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period of
time
which
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in which
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pupil
could not
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cannot
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have enough
time
with their family.
For instance
, some
students
visit their
parents
in
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during
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school
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the school
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holidays and it is just about
between
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fourteen days to a month. Other
students
prefer to work during their free
time
,
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because they
are needed
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need
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a
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money for tuition
fee
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fees
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.
By contrast
, boarding
school
has a lot of
benefit
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benefits
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that
students
get more independent and live in a playful environment with their new friends.
Therefore
, they
maybe
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may
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learn to work in
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a
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team together. In Japan,
for example
,
significant
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a significant
the significant
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number of
students
participate
for
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in
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volunteer
fork
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work
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throughout when
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when
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the
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school
term. Maybe it will help when
children
are
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get a job and their career planning. Those who support
think
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this think
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that
children
know about many advantages of
workplace
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the workplace
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and
co- operative
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co-operative
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. In conclusion, my own feeling is that boarding
school
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schools
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can be given many benefits for their pupils. Of course, I believe that
students
can be more independent and
well known
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well-known
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about new
city
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cities
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and
country
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countries
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.
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