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It is thought by some that it is better to live in a city while others believe that life is better in the countryside. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

#city #life #countryside
People
 are divided in their view regarding whether living in the
countryside
 is the better or an urban centre. In my ,opinion bother arguments have some valid points,
however
, I still believe that living in an urban town opens the door to career progression and financial development for individuals.
On the other hand
, some
people
 believe and I agree, that
city
 life brings so many colossal benefits.
Firstly
 there are plenty of opportunities for jobs and doing
business
 due to the proliferation of population and availability of big companies.
People
 can earn more money and become wealthier by working hard. Many
business
 tycoons have migrated from rural areas and created massive wealth in urban places.
Secondly
, by staying in the
city
people
 can broaden their horizons by meeting various individuals involved in different fields
such
 as science, engineering
business
 and so on. As a ,result their social circle will increase, which will really help them in their future career and in the
business
 sphere.
Lastly
, the
city
 life offers so many luxuries and comforts that are not there in the
countryside
 site.
On the other hand
, it is thought by many that rural places are very much peaceful. There is no traffic congestion or bottleneck. By living in the
countryside
 one can enjoy the natural beauty of
such
 places as, ponds, rivers mountains, farmlands and soon. Another thing to consider here is the cost, as there is less population.
Moreover
, most of the farming happens in the
countryside
 ,
therefore
. The cost of cereals and food grains is much lesser than in the
city
.
This
 means
people
 can have a lot of saving which would eventually be good for their future. In conclusion,
people
 may vary in their opinion, but in my point of view, though the
countryside
 brings the joy of living in a soothing environment and less cost to live a composed life, the development chances and opportunities to create wealth offered by urban towns are very much essential to consider
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • metropolitan
  • infrastructure
  • cosmopolitan
  • commute
  • sociocultural
  • prosperity
  • sustainability
  • rural
  • tranquility
  • urbanization
  • relocation
  • residential
  • populace
  • ecological footprint
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