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Some people think it is more important to spend time in developing a successful career while others think it is more important to spend time with friends and family. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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Many people say that work hard until you can rest without worrying about your finance while some people say it is more important to spend your
quality
 with
friends
 and family. In
this
 essay, I will discuss from both perspectives and I will comment on my own opinion at the end of the essay. On the one hand, everyone has to work for a living. Without any careers, it would be very meaningless for a
person
 to have nothing to do. For
this
 reason, each
person
 has a duty to earn money for themselves, for their family or for the future. Even though a
person
 has a developing successful
career
, he has to make that he gets promoted to a higher position in his
career
 and earns a lot of money.
As a result
, that
person
's future is going to be assured that he will not have to worry about his finance just by working so hard by spending full
time
 on his
career
.
On the other hand
, spending
quality
time
 with family and
friends
 is
also
 a necessary thing in a
person
's life.
As a result
, he can keep in touch with family and other family members will
also
 get closer to him.
Also
 for
friends
,
friends
also
 play an important role in life. It is very crucial to spend
time
 with their close
friends
 to share their secrets.
As a result
, a
person
 will be less worried about his family and
friends
. To conclude, in my personal opinion, not only working in a successful
career
 is important, but
also
 spending
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quality
time
 with family and
friends
 is crucial. As I am a hard-working
person
, I prefer to earn money rather than spend
quality
time
 with family and
friends
.
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