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Band 4

It is better to save money than to spend it.How far do you agree with this statement.

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Nowdays
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people
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prefare
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prefer
 to keep
money
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 than
spend
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itspend
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. In my
opinion
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in
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at
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 some
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points
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point
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 it is preferable to have some
money
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 for black days but I don`t go
in
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into
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 the Idea that
people
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 should restrict their
need
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needs
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 just for saving. Many like to have a great amount of
money
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 on their bank card or in
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another
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an other
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another
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 type of wealth.
Nowdays
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Nowadays
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 when
people
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 are more
depend
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from
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on
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 industrial products,
elctronics
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electronics
 and other
thinghs
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things
 which they can only have with paying for them, they become more
depressive
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 about saving
money
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 for
a
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the
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 future .
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example
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people
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 like to save
money
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 for medicine or for buying new and big apartments and luxury cars and for that they are ready even to
restricts
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 their daily needs. I heard about
a
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one doctor who have
big
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a big
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 salary and about 80 % he saved in
bank
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the bank
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 and for buying many houses for
thr
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the
 future passive income, but with some reasons which
were not depend
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did not depend
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from
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on
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him
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,him
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 he lost everything in that city and become
very
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a very
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 depressive cause for that he worked all his life. For me saving
money
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have
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 never been a primary goal, because I think we are not sure about our future even about
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next
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the next
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 day and we should live in all power which we can. For
rest
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the rest
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 of
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the soul
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soul
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people
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 can have some saved wealth but
its
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it
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 don`t be greater
thant
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than
that
 10 % of their salary.
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example
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 I save only 10%
from
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of
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 my salary every month in a private bank only for emergency events like
for
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apply
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medicine or something else In
conclusion
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,conclusion
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 I
am not agree
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do not agree
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 that more preferable to save
money
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nowdays
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nowadays
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 because our life is dynamic and we should live for
present
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the present
a present
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 but for some
needs
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,needs
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 we can save some
money
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emergency
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for emergency
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 events
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