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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

#countries #people #history #house #research
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 a line chart that illustrates the percentage of people in
possesion
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possession
 of 3 electrical appliances (Washing machine,
refigerator
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refrigerator
 and vacuum cleaner ) in one country from 1920 to 2019 and another line chart that gives information about the weekly time spent per
housework
 in
housework
 during the same
period
 of time. Overall, there is
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 increasing tendency in the ownership of all appliances and there is a downward trend in the number of
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 spent
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housework
 in whole the
period
 shown. While in 1920 no appliance was owned by more than 50% of the households, in 2019 all percentages were above
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70%. The time spent
in
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housework
 each week plummeted from 50
hours
 to around 10
hours
 in 1920 and 2019 respectively. The refrigerator is the appliance that grew the most from a negligible percentage in 1920 to 100% ownership in 1980 and
then
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 rest of the
period
. Something similar happened with the vacuum cleaner going from 30% to full ownership in 1920 and 2000 respectively.
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, washing machine figures rose
dusring
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during
 the
first
 years, peaked in 1960 at 70%
then
 it dipped but started to increase slowly after 1980. The number of
hours
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housework
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first
 40 years from 50
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 they moderately declined the rest of the
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Historical research
  • Genealogy
  • Architectural styles
  • Heritage
  • Relics
  • Oral history
  • Archival records
  • Museum exhibits
  • Historical societies
  • House tours
  • Renovation projects
  • Original blueprints
  • Careful documentation
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