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Some people think that healthcare should be free for everyone others think that people should pay for their medical costs themselves. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #healthcare #costs
Nowadays, the cost of medical services has
increase
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 rapidly, so many people insist that it should be free of charge to every individual. While some argue that it is highly recommended that it is chargeable whenever day used it or need it. I shall examine both views and reckon my position
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this
 topic. It is noticeable to the former view, that the main reason is the
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 of medicare in the country. Due to many new discovered
disease
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,
that is
high-priced
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a high-priced
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 treatment
to be
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 needed and it is fatal to a patient whenever they do not meet the proper procedure that
has
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 recommend by the
physcian
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physician
.
For
instance
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 when a client is hospitalized she will be
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a charge
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charge
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to
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many bills in different areas,
such
 as Doctor's
fee
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fees
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, rooms,and some materials that a doctor had consumed and depending
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 what procedure she had received.
In addition
 to
this
 an extra charge for the taxes as
wel
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well
.
Therefore
 numerous people cannot afford the costly treatment.
On the contrary
, few
inhabitant
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 disagree
to
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this
 view, it is because a person is responsible to pay for any services rendered by a medical team, so many healthcare can maintain their good
seervice
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service
 . In
this
case
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 when a client
undergone
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for
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any procedure like
sugery
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surgery
 the patient is liable
to
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 the fee so that the public- healthcare can able to replenish
those consumed instrument
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that consumed instrument
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 that they used. In my belief,
to
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this
 idea is a way to positive
developmetn
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development
developments
 in
the
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society. I
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therefore
 conclude that it is beneficial to everyone to have a complimentary medical services but it should not
all
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 the time.
Hence
 people are in control
their
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of their
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 health to
preventhing
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preventing
ilnesses
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illnesses
.
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