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Every day, millions of tons of food are wasted all over the world. Why do you think this is happening? And how can we solve this problem

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In recent years, with the growing up of population, the demand
of
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food
 is
also
 increased. The issue of how to
sloving
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solving
a tons
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tons
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 of
food
 rubbish wasted
in to
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 the environment
everyday
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 has aroused people’s discussion. Recently, numerous negative
effect
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 have arisen
as a result
 of
this
 and society can take steps to
minigate
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mitigate
 these potential problems. There
are
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 two primary
reason
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 why people wasted.
Firslty
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Firstly
First
 is the lack of accessible
food
 rescue and recycling
services
.
Similarly
, not all restaurants, grocery stores, and other
food
services
 and retailers have access to composting systems or
food
 donation
services
.
Secondly
, consumers expect their fruits and veggies
in
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 the perfect shape, size, and
color
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 and
refusing
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 to buy ugly
food
, they think that the quality of
these
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food
 is not good. There are several actions that
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government
governments
goverment
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 could take to solve
those problem
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that problem
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. We must strengthen
food
 rescue systems. That means making donation
services
 more accessible,
having
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food
 and retail businesses partner with donation
centers
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. The
second
 solution would be setting up systems to donate unwanted fruits and veggies to organizations that help feed the hungry and
food
 insecure because a piece of produce looks funky doesn’t mean it’s bad. In conclusion, it is clear that there are various
reason
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reasons
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 why people wasted so
many
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food
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foods
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 and
appropiate
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appropriate
 steps need to be taken to tackle
these problem
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this problem
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