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Every day, millions of tons of food are wasted all over the world. Why do you think this is happening? And how can we solve this problem?

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Nowadays, to serve a billion
people
 each day we need a huge of
food
 and sometimes
people
 can consume it. In the following essay, I discuss some of
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reason
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reasons
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 why
people
 do it and how to solve that problem. There are a hundred
of
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reasons why a large amount of
food
 is wasted every year.
First
, since most fresh
foods
,
such
 as meat and vegetables, are perishable, they usually have expired or best before dates.
This
 means that if
people
 do not consume them quickly enough,
foods
 will be expired and no longer to use, which results in
food
waste
.
Second
, the way humans prepare
foods
also
 contributes to
food
waste
.
For example
, if
foods
 are badly prepared, either at home or in
the
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 restaurant,
people
 will confuse to
eat
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 and
food
waste
 will often occur
as a result
.
Nevertheless
, there are
also
 a variety of solutions to improve
this
 trend.
First
, even if some
foods
are not use
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 for humans, they can be composted or used to feed livestock or animals.
This
 would not only benefit the agriculture industry but
also
 help reduce
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 organic matter that can be damaging to the environment.
Second
, even if the
food
waste
is not use
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 for livestock, it can still be used as a material to produce renewable energy.
For example
,
in
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Singapore and some
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 nations have taken steps to turn organic matter from
food
waste
 into biogas, generating electrical power at very low costs. In conclusion, even though
food
waste
 seems not harmless in today’s world, there are various ways to recycle it. Feeding livestock and
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 energy can be two of the most useful ways to tackle
food
waste
.
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