Some people think that dangerous sports should be banned, while others think people should be free to choose. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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threatening sports should be removed as per their opinion and on
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game
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of life too. Games and sports should be given
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to pick their own
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.If it is given their choice they will play excellency.They will improve each and every day.Even their mentality of power will increase because of their excitement to play.
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if they like to play football ,not only physically they will utilize
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in which ankle it is possible to goal.So it would be more
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to pick their own choice. On the other side, games like risky to their life should be removed.
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hard to play .while watching it seems simple and interesting to watch.But the one who playing some got
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their ear,leg
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fractured
etc..like that games should be removed.
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it defers to person
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about the choosing
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.some like risky
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game
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.Should give their choice
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to select
game
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unless there is less harm to their body.
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