are enjoyable, but it's strange that even though people know 
 have  their drawbacks too, people still play them. Over the years, it has emerged that most teenagers are choosing to play 
 with their friends rather than going out and doing outdoor activities. Many parents who are worried that their 
 will become irresponsible 
 have criticized their kids or confiscated their phones/computers, hoping they get a better life or grades. 
, I believe that 
 can develop their 
 if they play 
 , and gaming  can be a way to earn a living
           
 of all, 
 can develop their 
 if they play 
 . 
 can be classified into different types, for 
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 type 
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  contains many levels that require the player to solve by using 
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 , solve various puzzles in order to pass and make it to the 
 level. If 
 are willing to practice their ability to solve 
 effectively. 
 type of 
 can be chosen as a learning assistant. 
, 
 can improve their socializing 
 by communicating with other gamers.
         
, gaming can be a way to earn a living. 
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  is one of the careers 
 growing in popularity nowadays. Streamers can earn money by streaming 
 for viewers to watch and gain 
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 support from them, mainly by donating. 
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  is another career, which is an e-sport athlete. 
 with great gaming 
 can become 
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 e-sport 
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 . Generally, each 
 has its own league 
 in which the winners of the tournament are rewarded with prize money and will 
 receive fame. 
, the increase in the number of people who play 
 created many new careers.
         
, many parents claim that 
 have a negative effect on 
’s health. It causes eye 
, with symptoms 
 as dry eyes, red eyes or irritated eyes, and these symptoms  can occur if a kid spends a long time staring at a 
 screen. It may be true that some 
 will face physical health 
. 
, these 
 can be solved easily if 
 can learn to improve management 
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  their kids to be responsible for themselves. 
 need to learn how to manage and balance their time to fit their lifestyle, and if they are able to do it, playing 
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  problem for them anymore.
         In conclusion, for all reasons mentioned above, 
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  playing 
. 
 as a way to earn a living, choose as a learning assistant, even helping 
 to be responsible for themselves. Playing 
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  if they know how to manage their time and take care of themselves properly.