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Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

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Many processed foods and drinks are packed with
sugar
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 and
this
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 leads to many health issues. I agree that
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 to reduce
sugar
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 consumption,
sugar
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-packed
products
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 should be sold at a higher price. Many
people
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 over-consume sugary
products
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 because they are cheap.
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, in the United States, many fast-food restaurants offer free refills on sodas.
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, customers tend to have two or even three sodas at a meal. If these restaurants were required to implement a 20% tax on these drinks and stop supplying free refills, many customers probably wouldn’t order one at all, let alone have a
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 one. A regulation like
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 could be extremely effective in terms of preventing obesity among low-income
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 since many of them are high consumers of cheap
sugar
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-sweetened foods and beverages.
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, making high-
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products
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 more expensive can promote healthier eating choices.
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 is because if the prices of these
products
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 increase to a point at which
people
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 are unable to afford them regularly, they may turn to foods that are healthier and more affordable.
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, if a can of strawberry-flavoured beverage costs 3 times the price of a box of fresh strawberries, why not choose the cheaper fresh fruits which can
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 satisfy a craving for
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.
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 fresh fruits
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 contain sugars, natural sugars are much healthier than added ones. In conclusion,
sugar
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-sweetened
products
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 should be made more costly to reduce
sugar
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 intake. For one thing, the over-consumption of these
products
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 is partly because of their low cost. For another, increasing their price could encourage
people
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 to choose healthier food.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health problems
  • manufactured food and drink products
  • sugary products
  • excessive sugar consumption
  • discourage
  • promote
  • healthier choices
  • reduce
  • increased taxes
  • fund
  • health education
  • prevention programs
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