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Many animal species in the world are becoming extinct nowadays.Some people say that countries and individuals should protect these animals from dying out ,while others say we should concentrate more on problems of human beings.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#species #world #people #countries #individuals #animals #beings
In recent years,animal protection has become
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 significant concerned issue.Public take different attitudes towards the increasing attention on wildlife conservation.Some
people
 suggest that the fund should be redirected to helping other fields in
society
,
such
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 poverty and
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 education
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.I agree with
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 idea that the investment
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 wildlife protection is not worthwhile. Admittedly,
animals
 as a key component of the whole food chain,have a crucial impact on the sustainability of an ecosystem.Every
animals
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 species play an important role in natural balance.
For instance
,the extinction of any species will lead to the growth or decline of other species.If the number of beneficial birds declines,the number of pests and mice will increase dramatically.
This
 not only destroys the original ecological balance
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but
also
 causes the loss of
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,causing food shortages and economic loss.If
people
 did not take any actions to protect wildlife as soon as possible,we
human
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 would be affected in the end.
However
,there are more urgent problems that we need to focus
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society
 rather than protecting
animals
.The main task of
society
 is to improve
people
`s living standards and reduce poverty.There are many
people
 living under
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 line and suffering from the harvest and bad living
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.If the government can not support
people
,it cannot protect
animals
.
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Further more
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,technology and education are
another
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 two aspects of government to concern.These two industries accelerate the development of
society
,which can provide more advanced technology. In conclusion,
although
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animals
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 a significant part of
ecosystem
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the ecosystem
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,it is better for government to invest more fund and resources in other social problems.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • cascading effects
  • economic impacts
  • ecosystem
  • endangered species
  • environmental conservation
  • human welfare
  • moral duty
  • preserve
  • sustainable practices
  • habitats
  • interconnected
  • extinction
  • advocates
  • opponents
  • priority
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