Many animal species in the world are becoming extinct nowadays.Some people say that countries and individuals should protect these animals from dying out ,while others say we should concentrate more on problems of human beings.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In recent years,animal protection has become

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significant concerned issue.Public take different attitudes towards the increasing attention on wildlife conservation.Some

people

suggest that the fund should be redirected to helping other fields in

society

,

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poverty and

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education

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.I agree with

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idea that the investment

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wildlife protection is not worthwhile. Admittedly,

animals

as a key component of the whole food chain,have a crucial impact on the sustainability of an ecosystem.Every

animals

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species play an important role in natural balance.

For instance

,the extinction of any species will lead to the growth or decline of other species.If the number of beneficial birds declines,the number of pests and mice will increase dramatically.

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not only destroys the original ecological balance

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but

also

causes the loss of

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,causing food shortages and economic loss.If

people

did not take any actions to protect wildlife as soon as possible,we

human

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would be affected in the end.

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,there are more urgent problems that we need to focus

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society

rather than protecting

animals

.The main task of

society

is to improve

people

`s living standards and reduce poverty.There are many

people

living under

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line and suffering from the harvest and bad living

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.If the government can not support

people

,it cannot protect

animals

.

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,technology and education are

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two aspects of government to concern.These two industries accelerate the development of

society

,which can provide more advanced technology. In conclusion,

although

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animals

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a significant part of

ecosystem

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,it is better for government to invest more fund and resources in other social problems.