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Inspire of advances made in agriculture many people around the world so hungry. What is this cause what can be done about this problem.

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It is irrefutable fact that in the light of
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 era, advancement of technology spread influence
Everyfield
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Every field
 of the world and agriculture is not
excempted
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exempted
 from
this
.
Although
 advances made in
agriculture
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 field
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many individuals around the world are hungry.
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chief
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 reasons behind
this
 issue along with some possible remedies to
mitigate
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. Beginning with there
are
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number
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a number
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 of reasons which justify
that
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why many people are hungry in every nation.
First
 and foremost, due to
inflation
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,inflation
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 the charges
of
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for
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 goods are too high and people who belong to joint families are unable to afford
it
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them
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.
Moreover
, with
this
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 the cost of
food
 is increasing day by day. As well as, being overpopulated cities, the demand
of
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for
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food
 is higher
as
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compared to
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 supply. Research conducted by world
Food
 organizations,
for example
, in India
which
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shows that 70
percent
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per cent
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people
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of people
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hungry
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are hungry
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 due to lack of
food
 and ignorance of
government
.
As a result
,
shortage
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the shortage
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 of
food
 has many root causes behind it.
On the other hand
, there are some possible measures for tackling
this
 problem.
Firstly
,
government
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the government
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 should provide
cost
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the cost
a cost
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 of free
food
 as well as confer information related to
importance
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the importance
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 of
food
. Meanwhile,
government
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the government
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 can reduce the price
that
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so that
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 everyone can afford
it
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and
fulfill
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 their family needs. To cite an example,
survey
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a survey
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 has been conducted in
USA
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the USA
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 which shows that 80
percent
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 populace solve their
food
 issues by receiving aid from
government
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the government
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 in the term of free of cost
food
 every month.
Therefore
, these are
the
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fruitful ways for solving
this
 problem. To sum up,
although
 there
are
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is
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number
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a number
the number
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 of reasons behind
this
 problem
but
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with some suitable
remedies
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,remedies
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food
 shortage can be resolved.
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