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In spite of advances made in agriculture many people around the world so hungry. What is this case. What can be done about this problem.

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In
this
modren
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modern
 world, the demand
of
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for
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food
 increase
day
 by
day
. Apart from advancement in
agricultre
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agriculture
alot
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a lot
lot
 of
population
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the population
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 is hungry.
This
 statement
contain
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 some causes and solution which
i
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 will discuss in upcoming paragraphs with suitable examples. Beginning with the causes behind the inclination in the proportion of hungry
people
.
Firstly
, due to inflation in
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the prize
a prize
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prize
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price
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 of goods and things.To explain it today’s
infation
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inflation
information
 world everyone can not
offord
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afford
 expensive
food
 or things.Like joint
familier
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families
 are unable to
offord
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afford
 it. Meanwhile, overpopulation
is become
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 a major reason
of
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for
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lack
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the lack
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 of
food
. As well asindustrlization is one of the main
reason
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reasons
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 because it
consume
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consumes
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 agriculture plant.cause of it agriculture plant is
decresing
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decreasing
day
 by
day
 .
For example
 ,
survey
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a survey
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conduct
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conducted
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 by
national
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a national
the national
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 agricultural authority
which
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apply
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shows that
last
 year 20%
people
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of people
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fuffer
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suffer
 from
lack
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a lack
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 of
food
.
As a result
, these are the causes which put more impact on
food
 resources.
On the other hand
,
firstly
,
government
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the government
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 should make strategies for providing
food
. To explain it,
people
 below
poverty
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the poverty
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 line so government should provide free of
coste
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cost
food
 for those
people
. Apart from
this
, higher authorities should tackle the
prize
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price
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 of
food
. They should declaration of
list
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the list
a list
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 of
food
 prizes which is
best
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the best
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 way to control the high prizes . To cite an example, in
india
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India
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, 30% poverty less in
last
 year cause of good
stratigy
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strategy
 in
food
 prices.
As a result
, these are the ways
which
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that which
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 government can use to tackle
this
 problem. To sum up,
although
, there
are
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varoius
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various
 reason behind the
people
 who are suffering from lack of
food
but
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apply
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with
suitable
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the suitable
a suitable
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solution
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,solution
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 it can be handled.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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