With the rapid advancement of communication technology: smart phones, tablets and other mobile devices, some people believe that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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this

day and age, there is no doubt that the development of the

internet

has made our people's lives a lot easier and more convenient while some individuals think that it has more drawbacks than benefits. In my personal opinion, I disagree that the disadvantages overshadow the advantages and I will explain why in the paragraphs.

First

and foremost, it is undeniable that the

internet

is playing an important role in

this

age and era since everything is connected with the

internet

locally and globally. There are many things that are connected to the

internet

such

as shopping, communications, education, work and so on.

For example

, most people use social media

such

as Facebook and Instagram to communicate with each other in an easy and fast way. Another example is that we can know the global

news

just by checking the BBC

news

website in a

second

and

news

can be shared within a minute through the social media we can know the

news

as soon as it occurs.

On the other hand

, children can

also

study online via zoom and other platforms like google meet and google classroom.

As a result

, they will have extra time to study and revise what they have learnt and they can

also

save their energy.

In addition

, for the working people, they do not have to go long journey to work and they can

also

work from home which is very time and energy saving.

However

although

there are so many benefits, there can be many disadvantages

such

as not being productive and being lazy by working and studying from home. To conclude,

although

there are a few drawbacks, it is undeniable that technology has made everything a lot easier and helps us to connect with everything from all around the world.

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