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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays,
people
 tend to pay more attention to the
environment
 than a century ago.
However
, environmentalists remain obscurity about the main reason that causes harm to the globe we are living in.
This
 writing will point out that there are more influential problems than the extinction of particular
plants
 and animals.
First
,
plants
 indeed contribute to refreshing the
environment
. They release oxygen from carbon dioxide and water in the daylight.
On the contrary
, there are a lot more problems caused by human activities that poison the
environment
such
 as deforestation, overpopulation, pollution, and the burning of fossil fuels. Especially because
people
 have polluted the atmosphere with chemicals containing chlorine and bromine, the “ozone hole” developed and has extended annually. The emission from chemical factories and cars worsens the air quality and caused global warming. Some
people
 say that
plants
 are dominant because they produce oxygen and that animals take part in protecting the greenery on Earth.
However
, the vanishing of all living forms is predictable and a part of nature. Throughout the evolutions of Earth, there are a huge amount of species that couldn't survive, but life on
this
 planet is still persisting.
Consequently
, the loss of
plants
 does not significantly affect the
environment
.
People
 just need to plant more trees to ensure providing enough oxygen and other needs. To conclude, human pollution has always been the main reason for most environmental issues. We lost a species as time passed by, which is normal, but
besides
 natural disasters, it is our actions that threaten our own life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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