Nowadays technology is increasingly being uswd to monitor what people are saying or doing. So you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Without a doubt technology has made our lives easier,
however
, in recent times it is been used to spy on
people
's conversations and activities.
Although
this
makes the general public lose trust in the
government
, I believe the helps to improve the security of a country against enemies at home and abroad. On the one hand, the main detrimental effect of using technology to monitor
people
's whereabouts and what they are doing is that it makes them paranoid about their
government
.
This
is because they feel they can be manipulated with the information that
people
might have heard about them,
therefore
they might not cooperate with new rules and regulations in their society even to their own detriment.
For instance
, in Russia, some persons refused to get vaccinated against the covid virus, because they feel their
government
knew that they were against the current
government
. As
this
was just a way to kill them.
However
, despite
this
drawback, the benefits of being able to track and terminate potential threats to a country are far superior.
This
is because ,with the help of artificial intelligence computers, mobile phones, messages and calls can be monitored, tracked and traced to a specific location,
thus
making it easier to capture criminals.
For example
, France intelligence Units were able to avert a planned terrorist attack on their airport two years ago.
This
was achieved following three-month surveillance of the laptop of the terrorist
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after his computer was flagged by the artificial intelligence while using the internet, and
subsequently
arrested at his home.
As a result
of
this
, a lot of lives were saved and
this
goes to show the importance of technology monitoring. In conclusion,
although
people
might lose confidence in their
government
from them disrespecting their privacy,
however
, I believe that the advantage of being able to prevent catastrophic loss of human lives by improving security surpasses any downside.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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