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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

you have to write a paragraph of about 150 words about a problem you faced and how you solved it.

For as long as I can remember, the meaningful challenge in my job experience is when I worked as a department manager, there was a new employee who repeatedly provided incomplete
reports
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. They were asked repeatedly to include all the necessary information, but the
reports
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 continued to lack all data and had to be redone for someone else to do their job. At
first
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, I was very upset and wanted to fire her, but I wondered if the new hire was getting the information clear, so I created a sample report for the new hire showing all the requested data. I
also
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 asked other supervisors to review
this
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 with their
reports
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 and post a chart of when the
reports
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 are due.
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, everyone's reporting quality improves, not just new hires. I learned that it is really important to listen and clearly communicate expectations in order to achieve the desired results.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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