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What motivates and inspires you? How will you use your experience and strengths in order to contribute to the program and enrich the experiences of your classmates?

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The motivation that encourages me to pursue my study in MSc International Finance
program
 is the impact of money,
such
 as foreign exchange rates, economic situations, and the
interest
rate
, on the individual organization, and society from the past to the present.
For example
, the currency appreciation or currency depreciation of each country causes the cost of goods and services in everyday life to decrease or increase
accordingly
. The changes in price give dramatic changes in terms of advantages and disadvantages towards personal expenses.
Moreover
,
this
 effect
also
 has an impact on each company’s expenses because the company has to use more money for expenses from increasing commodity prices. Increasing commodity prices causes Federal Reserve Bank to increase the
interest
rate
 in order to reduce the inflation in the financial system.
However
, the rising
interest
rate
 has a negative effect on the firm because they have to pay more loans resulting in the bankruptcy of the firm. I am confident that if I study
this
program
, I can use the knowledge that I get from
this
program
 to adjust and adapt to the firm.
For instance
, when I can carefully analyze the cause of increasing and decreasing
interest
rate
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 will, I will be able to make a suggestion to the president of the company at that time on how we should operate the business. From my experience, I graduated in electrical engineering. I believe that the capability of technology and computer programming is my strength. I can use that knowledge to adapt beneficial methods to
this
program
 including exchanging my experience with classmates and professors. I am confident that new technologies and innovations will play a crucial role in helping the financial management system that becomes more precisely and rapidly when compared with the past.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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