Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing (for example through cellphone tracking and security cameras).In many cases the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening.

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all types of
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being used in our life or jobs because
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being controlled by cameras.As a
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nobody can cheat. Every time
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