Some people say that individuals who make a lot of money are the most successful. Others think that those who contribute to society like scientists and teachers are more successful. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.
Many
people
define having a Use synonyms
life
Use synonyms
such
as high income and profitable or beneficial jobs Linking Words
is
achieved Correct your spelling
as
life
. Use synonyms
This
definition Linking Words
is obviously conflicts
Change the verb form
is obviously conflicting
to
Change preposition
with
this
Linking Words
capitalism
Replace the word
capitalist
society
, there Use synonyms
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
also
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people
Use synonyms
believe
having Correct pronoun usage
who believe
a sacrificial jobs
Correct the article-noun agreement
a sacrificial job
sacrificial jobs
are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
the
true achievement. From each viewpoint, I believe they all have reason to assert Correct article usage
a
the
opinions.
Our Change the word
their
society
used to Use synonyms
Add an article
the idolised
an idolised
idolised
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idolise
Correct article usage
a community
community
Fix the agreement mistake
communities
who
is wealthy Correct pronoun usage
that
however
soon as our Linking Words
society
became Use synonyms
a
true individual capitalism, Remove the article
apply
middle
group of Add an article
the middle
people
stop to Use synonyms
fallow
them, Correct your spelling
follow
people
choose to pioneer for Use synonyms
itself
. Correct pronoun usage
themselves
Therefore
, rich Linking Words
people
are seen as selfish and do commit to Use synonyms
the
Correct article usage
apply
society
. While Use synonyms
people
are saying harmful about rich Use synonyms
people
, Use synonyms
wealth
Replace the word
wealthy
people
create tones of money, Use synonyms
also
hire Linking Words
thousand
of Correct your spelling
thousands
people
and the taxes taken by Use synonyms
government
is used for the community. If they weren’t there normal Add an article
the government
people
will not allow Use synonyms
to have
our daily Change the verb form
having
life
. Even being existing is helpful for the community.
Use synonyms
On the other hand
,sacrificial jobs Linking Words
such
as doctors, Linking Words
Correct your spelling
firemen
fire men
and Correct your spelling
firemen
police
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policeman
man
, commonly admired and respected Fix the agreement mistake
men
from
many Change preposition
by
people
, Use synonyms
they
are saving many other Correct pronoun usage
apply
Use synonyms
Change noun form
people’s
people’
Correct your spelling
people's
life
without caring themselves for numerous years of their short or long Use synonyms
life
. Use synonyms
For example
, in Linking Words
19century
, Correct article usage
the 19century
the
infectious disease was completely uncontrollable and the sterilization system was not valid Correct article usage
apply
therefore
it leads to Linking Words
death
Correct article usage
the death
to
many Replace the word
too
patient
. Change to a plural noun
patients
Consequently
, many doctors start to invent a vaccine that can prevent earn any disease from each other, after many doctors involve and sacrifice they created Linking Words
Add an article
a vaccine
vaccine
that can save Fix the agreement mistake
vaccines
burden
Add an article
the burden
of
lives.
To sum up, both ideas are true Change preposition
apply
for
Change preposition
in
its
own way, we are not able Correct pronoun usage
their
judge
ideas from our individual viewpoints. They both contribute Add the particle
to judge
their
own ways.Change preposition
in their
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