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The internet is a great course of information and has opened up opportunities for people to learn all over the world. Is all information reliable on the internet? What could be done to control information online?

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While the internet has provided the public with new ways to collect
information
, there are some that we cannot fully trust.
This
 essay will explore what may be untrustworthy
news
 and suggest how we can prevent
people
 from being misled by
such
news
. Unlike before, when newspapers were the main source of
news
 distribution,
people
 now have more platforms to share
news
 and opinions.
This
 results in a large amount of unreliable
information
 being displayed online,
everyone
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 can access. While
information
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 published through official websites
such
 as government websites, academic forums and online newspaper is reliable,
information
 displayed on personal forums or blogs is sometimes false.
This
 is because
people
 think they have the freedom to show whatever they want, or just try to use fake
news
 to make fun of and mislead others. Controlling
this
 problem requires examining both the
news
 itself and the individual publishers.
Firstly
, websites should hire fact-checkers to check and remove false
information
, and
this
 can achieve better results by cooperating with the cyber police. By deleting false
news
, fewer
people
 will be affected.
Secondly
,
identity
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 should be strictly required when setting up online accounts before posting anything, by doing so,
people
 will have more self-discipline to post any unproved
news
.
Moreover
, punishments need to be made to those who breach the rules by posting or sharing false
information
. In conclusion, despite the fake online
news
 all around us, the problem can be controlled by the actions taken by the fact-checkers and ID proofs.
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