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Some people believe that humans should be able to use animals for their own benefit, while others argue that the rights of animals should be protected. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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People have different options regarding
animals
. While many nations thought that they prefer to use
animals
 for their own purposes.Whereas others considered that everyone should protect
animals
' rights.
This
 essay will examine cases of
this
 action and the forthcoming paragraphs try to discuss the agreement and the disagreement sides. On the one hand, The basic advantage of using
animals
 is that they can help humanity to reduce some kinds of difficult work, To put it another way, many years ago,
animals
 play an important role in society,Because during that dating community mainly earn money from the agricultural works by using
animals
 like crows, donkeys and so on.On the same occasion, significant modes of transportation are
horses
.
For example
, several years ago I watched one documentary film about the historical lifestyle and I catch interesting information is that a very useable animal type is
horses
 because during that time
horses
 showed the status of the population in public, what I mean, that time only rich people attain their own
horses
. Turn off the other hands of argument,presently,
animals
 consider very valuable inhabitants.
In other words
, today we live in a modern and technological world, that's why
society
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social
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 support to use of machinery
instead
 of
animals
.
Additionally
, In agricultural works humanity uses modern modes of transportation like tractors, robots and so on.
For instance
,
last
 year our government announced one law related to
animals
, like the authority make a tax for using
animals
 for some sorts of work because nations without
animals
 do not imagen their future lives. In conclusion, I support animal rights and I think it very common way to protect our environment and inhabitants.Because from the past
obviously
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 those
animals
 have been friends to our ancestors.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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