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In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by International fast food. Many people think that it is good to eat traditional foods while other believe that fast food is a good choice. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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It is often argued that traditional
food
 is beneficial to eat, whilst others disagree and think that
junk
food
 is a better option.
This
 essay discusses both
perspective
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 and why I believe that cultural
food
 is better in comparison to
the
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fast
food
 in terms of nutritional value. On the one hand, there are people who believe that
junk
food
 is a better choice because it saves
time
.
This
 is because these days people have
busier
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lifestyle
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life style
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lifestyle
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, due to that they are not finding ample
time
 to cook. When it comes to fast
food
 it is widely available and
moreover
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 if someone
want
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 to eat
food
 at home it takes only minutes to prepare the
food
unlike
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 the traditional
food
 which needs a lot of diligence and
time
 for
prepration
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preparation
.
For instance
, most
of
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the multinational companies in South Korea serve fast
food
 in their canteen to employees.
This
 saves the
time
of
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 employees and it leads to
enhance
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 their productivity at work.
Therefore
,
junk
food
 is
better
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a better
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 choice when it comes to
food
 due to its
time saving
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time-saving
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 potential.
On the other hand
, others think that traditional
food
 is more healthy.
This
 is because cultural
food
include
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 only
the
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fresh ingredients and does not involve
usage
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 of preservatives and frozen products, which may be unhealthy for human consumption.
As a result
, it boosts the immunity of human beings and helps them to stay away from diseases. To illustrate, a recent study concluded that a primary cause of obesity in
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American teenagers is linked with increased consumption of
food
 from the
fast
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fast-food
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food
 chains
such
 as
kfc
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KFC
 and burger king.
Thus
, in order to stay healthy and fit, it is preferred to consume traditional
food
 only. In conclusion, while
junk
food
 is a good option for the working professionals in terms of
time saving
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time-saving
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. It is my firm belief that cultural
food
 is the best.
The
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This
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 is because traditional
food
 meets the standard dietary daily requirements, which is crucial to
maintain
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 a healthy lifestyle.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutritional value
  • culinary heritage
  • preserve traditions
  • global cuisine
  • obesity epidemic
  • dietary habits
  • convenience factor
  • food culture
  • sustainable practices
  • local produce
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