Some people think the technology makes life complex, so we should make life simpler without using the technology. Do you agree or disagree?
It is generally acknowledged by certain individuals that due to the development of
technology
, the public's life
is increasingly becoming complicated. Therefore
, They believe that individuals should simplify their lives without using cutting-edge technology
. However
, regarding this
, I strongly disagree with this
assertion since technology
has facilitated to fulfill
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fulfil
basic
human needs properly.
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of basic
To begin
with, the Internet which is the most significant invention in contemporary society has enabled children to study remotely. Not only can online classes contribute to participation
of disabled children, but they may Add an article
the participation
also
bring about flexible schedules, thereby leading to allowing people
working
full time during studying. Change the verb form
to work
For example
, in Canada, since most language schools have provided online classes, international students who couldn't come to Canada due to the pandemic have studied through the Internet. As the example clearly illustrates, if it had not been for the advanced technology
, students would not have studied abroad during certain difficult situations such
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a pandemic
pandemic
, so their Fix the agreement mistake
pandemics
life
became easier than before.
Secondly
, in the modern era, the enhancement of public transportation has reduced traffic congestions
in cities. Fix the agreement mistake
congestion
Moreover
, it has also
dicreased
the emission of exhaust fumes Correct your spelling
decreased
of
private cars. Change preposition
from
For instance
, recent media in Korea reports that almost 10% of greenhouse gases which are relesed
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released
invented
. Add a missing verb
were invented
Therefore
, it is reasonable to point out that the latest transites
result in reducing traffic Correct your spelling
transitions
transits
transit
jam
and environmental issues Fix the agreement mistake
jams
such
as air pollution. Hence
, individuals' lives became convenient.
Finally
, cutting edge technology
in medical
industry has enabled to Add an article
the medical
maintain
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maintenance
the
population's health efficiently. As various equipment Change preposition
of the
such
as robots and devices have helped people
, they have simply extended their life
spans. In this
regard, patients do not die anymore owing to the cancers that
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are under
illneses
in the Correct your spelling
illnesses
illness
paast
. Correct your spelling
past
As a result
, people
can sustain their life
healtier
and longer along with Correct your spelling
healthier
technology
.
In conclusion, while some people
are concerned about technology
that made a
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apply
life
more sophisticated, there is no doubt to point out that technology
has even made a
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apply
life
easier and efficient
and Correct quantifier usage
more efficient
therefore
people
can simply achive
basic human needs.Correct your spelling
achieve
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