Nowadays, a lot of offices employ open-space designs instead of separate rooms for work. Do the advantage of this outweigh the disadvantages?

These days, working in an office has been changed. Many people are questioning whether a company should create an open space for their employees
instead
of a private room. From my perspective, the benefits of
this
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the drawbacks. In
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essay, the reasons to support my opinion will be outlined. On one hand, a concentration, that sitting around others cannot provide, is essential for working. Because open offices can be noisy and distracting, some workers might lose their focus.
For example
, an accountant is a career that requires a great amount of concentration to calculate or type a number. If they work and
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not concentrate on it, they will lose some important details.
Thus
, some people might not
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to
this
type of working together and are likely to prefer working in separate rooms.
On the other hand
, working in an open space increases interaction within teams. They will have more opportunities to communicate with their colleagues.
Moreover
, an interaction makes a brainstorming that leads to innovation.
For instance
, a creative director is a career that has to share ideas with their teams. They collect every idea together and build it into a great innovation for their customer. If they work in a private room, they will
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likely to talk to each other and might not do it well.
Consequently
, workers will gain huge benefits from an open space.
To sum up
, working in an open area
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essential advantages. From my point of view,
although
this
might make people lose focus, it makes workers interact with each other, which is necessary for
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.
However
, the company should provide personnel, who want a concentration, with separate rooms to make a balance for everyone.
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Task Response
Ensure all points directly relate to the topic and focus on the advantages and disadvantages of open-space office designs. Consider providing more balanced arguments for both sides to enhance the task response.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs presenting arguments, and a conclusion. Work on enhancing the logical flow between sentences and paragraphs to improve coherence and cohesion. Use transition words and phrases to connect ideas effectively.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Collaboration
  • Communication
  • Cost-effectiveness
  • Partitioning
  • Reconfigure
  • Flexibility
  • Oversight
  • Productivity
  • Morale
  • Noise levels
  • Privacy
  • Exposure
  • Stress
  • Over-crowding
  • Confidential conversations
  • Spreading illnesses
  • Close proximity
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