People who decide on a career path early in their lives and keep to it are more likely to have a satisfying working life than those who often change jobs. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

It is increasingly common these days for many employers to switch jobs in their
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life frequently, which, from my perspective, will not shape a healthy
career
path
, compared with an early
career
exploration followed by
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stable
career
development.
Firstly
, planning a
career
path
early leaves employers more time to prepare themselves for their target jobs. Recruiters tend to prefer applicants with either professional certificates or qualifications related to the
career
field,
such
as certificates in public
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and in the National Judicial Examination. These certificates normally take years to earn and give their holders an advantage in both salaries and promotion. Unfortunately, those changing a new
career
field halfway could find it hard to achieve them. An early and continued
career
development is
also
less likely to face restrictions from financial and family perspectives. More specifically, starting a new
career
always begins with low pay or unpaid internship and overtime work for the sake of gaining experience and skills required in a particular profession. In fact, these realistic factors prevent a great many older workers who raise a family from changing
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. Young graduates, in comparison, will feel much freer in deciding on or switching their careers, choosing a job based on
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their personal interests or future
career
prospects. Despite the obvious advantages brought by
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early and steady
career
development, I do not believe
this
will always lead to a satisfying working life when employees feel not passionate about or dissatisfied with what they are doing. At
this
point, a move to another
career
is the right
path
to increased salary and new professional skills but
this
does not necessarily mean that changing jobs frequently is a wise choice because, in most cases, employers have
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lack of solid reasons for their frequent
career
change. In conclusion, I think a satisfying
career
life would be achieved by an early and continuing
career
path
rather than
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move from one job to the
next
.
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