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Libraries are irrelevant in the age of the internet and should not be publicly funded.” Do you agree or disagree?

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In the modern era, libraries are irrelevant and should not be publicly outlawed. I do not occur with the statement due to they should be a place that not only acknowledges their regions but
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 society communities where people have a social action and store treasury books.
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 of all, a library was act
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 a classroom where learners could gain their knowledge and a community where the elderly populace meet
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 as playing chess or having conversations there, whilst the time has changed, the purposes have transformed, many people are reading from smartphones (e-books) and a kindle (it is feature similars to tablet ),
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 ways the books are published more eco-friendly than before, they are reduced by using paperless.
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, libraries are far away from them as they were in the past.
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, they still should be given the money by government funding owning to they should be a tourists attraction for a town, where travellers can visit, a historical place which keeping any original referential history objects or even retirement person or people, who would love studying and having some brain stimulated work, can staying there for a while. To conclude, I would suggest that there should have a learning space for us to rest our minds in
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 a library despite it is not distinguished as that time before, it should not have vanished for the reason all above.
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