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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in Oder to travel to or work in a foreign country.other says that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn foreign language.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #reason #language #oder #travel #work #country #someone
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Learning a foreign
language
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 is a good skill. Some
people
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 believe that the only reason for learning
foreign
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a foreign
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language
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 is to travel abroad or to do a
job
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 in that country, while other
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 that these are not the only reasons why a person should learn a foreign
language
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. In
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i
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 will argue both views and give my opinion. In today's world, knowing
foreign
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a foreign
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language
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 is important for individuals especially for getting a
job
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 in that country. The
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 priority is given to those who know the
language
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 very well. Without
language
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skill
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 getting a
job
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 is impossible there.
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, those who have a good command
over
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 their foreign
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 can easily hire a
job
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, while on other hand those who do not know a foreign
language
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 encounter many problems.
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 of
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 he may be discouraged and not continue
to
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his efforts for learning that
language
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. While some other
people
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 believe that learning linguistic skills is
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 important for travelling
to
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abroad for many purposes, especially for educational
purpose
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purposes
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.
Majority
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The majority
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people
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of people
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 learn these skills
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in order
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inorder
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 to get admission
in
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abroad. For
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reason
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 they must learn that
country
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country's
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language
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.
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, for getting
an
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admission
in
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to
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 one of the top universities in
UK
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the UK
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 candidate must take overall band 7 in
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IELTS
 so to be enrolled in that university.
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result
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 his future is guaranteed and he will be successful in every
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 of his life. On the other side, some
people
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 believe that learning
foreign
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a foreign
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language
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 is a better way of communication and
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 avoiding problems. During school time some students encounter
problem
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problems
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 in their studies which is in
foreign
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a foreign
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language
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. For
instantance
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instance
, a
person
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person's
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 main aim
who
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when
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learn
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 English is to communicate very well with his friends and
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 get a good position in
school
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the school
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 In conclusion, knowing
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language
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the language
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 is essential for both
tavelling
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travelling
 and getting
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job
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a job
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 as well as a person should learn it
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in order
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inorder
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 to be successful in his school and
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 communicate well.
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