Some people think news has no connection to people’s lives, so it is a waste of time to read news in the newspaper and watch news programs on television. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There is a controversial perspective heating up a debate over whether
news
is irrelevant to Add an article
the news
human’s
lives and Change noun form
human
there
is no worth Correct word choice
whether there
to read
and Change the verb form
reading
watch
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watching
news
. Add an article
the news
While
it has its own perk
, I would contend that it has both pros and cons.
It is doubtless to say that Fix the agreement mistake
perks
news
plays such
a paramount indispensable role in citizen’s lives. By receiving news
daily, people could know more about recents
events of distinct aspects which belong to their cup of tea Correct your spelling
recent
everyday
. Replace the word
every day
For example
, inhabitants who take a keen interest in sports and activities will watch sports news
such
as football, while
businessmen would
be interested in economics and political Wrong verb form
will
news
. Hence
, dwellers can update all things and activities around the world through news
either on the internet or Change preposition
in newspaper
newspaper
.
Fix the agreement mistake
newspapers
While
the redeeming feature of news
is widely acknowledged, its counterpart still lingers. There are thousands of updated news
everyday
but not all of them are true. Because some criminals might write unsatisfactory posts in order to lead trusting inhabitants through the nose. Replace the word
every day
For instance
, celebrities could have a tendency to be victims of criticism by anti-fans who are jealous and would create rumors
and negative posts about them in order to push them down. Change the spelling
rumours
Thus
, not all news
may be useful and factual so residents have to select verified news
to read or hear.
In conclusion, connecting ordinary people to the news
might help people update everything around the world instantly but they may have undesirable consequences to somebody's life.Submitted by hominhtrang995 on
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Task Achievement
Clarify your position more clearly in the introduction, and restate it in the conclusion for consistency. This will help in achieving a complete response to the task.
Task Achievement
Develop your ideas more thoroughly. Include more specific examples to support your arguments. This will help in presenting clear and comprehensive ideas.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use a wider range of cohesive devices and paragraph structures to connect ideas more effectively within and between paragraphs. This will improve the essay's logical structure.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure your introduction and conclusion are clearly marked and fulfill their roles more effectively. The introduction should set up your essay's position and the conclusion should reiterate it, summarizing the main points.
Coherence and Cohesion
Support your main points more effectively with detailed examples and explanations. This strengthens your argument and makes your essay more coherent.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite