Some feel that cities should be designed to be beautiful while others feel their funtionality is more important. Discuss both side and give your own opinion.

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modern
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are developing day by day with new
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. According to some
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people
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cities
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have to
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better but
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others
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think that
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are too important.
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both views which I will discuss in upcoming paragraphs with suitable example. Beginning with the legitimate factor which
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thatwhy
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that why
cities
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should be designed.
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the help of
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design
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it can
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become
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. To explain it, better design always
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better
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look which
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the
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to visit there. So it can become a
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place. Meanwhile,
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role in the development of
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the country
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. When
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will come from other countries it will put
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impact on
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the economy
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.
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largest beautiful place which is the cause of
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attraction.
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, these are the benefits which
people
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can get
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beautiful
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the beautiful
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design of
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.
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, there are
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a lot
lot
of benefits Regarding the
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in
cities
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firstly
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,
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always
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better or easy lifestyle for
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an individual
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.To explain it,if a
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education system
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two
people
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it
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a good opportunity
regarding
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poor
people
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.
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,
government
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should spend on
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system and Internet
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which
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very useful for
people
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.
Internet
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provide
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online business
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which
people
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can do from their home.As well as transport
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also
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helpful for developing the
cities
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people
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can save their time with the transportation system.To cite an example,
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conducted by
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authority of India
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proved that the capital of Punjab
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city
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no more to help her rather than
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past with the help
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facilities
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.
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,these are the
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which
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become a developed
city
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. In
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conclusion
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,
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a
city
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beautiful or designed is
good
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way to improve the
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city
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status yet with the help of
facilities
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city
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the city
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can become
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more developed as well as beautiful.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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