In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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hungry yet. Many reasons are causes of that, and some decisions can solve these problems.

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to others. Income

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government. And inhabitants do not get some profit from it. Most people are poor and hungry

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because there is a bad government's economic

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in high-developed countries still go hungry. Governments should develop a strategy for their residents.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Differences between countries become less evident each year. Nowadays, all over the world, people share the same fashions, advertising, brands, eating habits and TV channels.

Some people think that it is important to have a single language as an official international language. Others think that it will make it difficult to identify countries and cause a loss of culture. what are your opinion on this?

Modern cultures around the world have become similar when compared to the past. What are the reasons? Is it a positive or negative development?

Many cities have vehicle-free day, which encourages citizens to take bus, cycle or take taxi to go out. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

There is a common belief that individuals working under physical pressure should receive the same wage as educated people with diploma. Personally, I agree with this statement. A number of arguments support my opinion.