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Some people think that stars do not deserve high salaries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The issue of entertainers and athletes who gross millions of dollars every year is of great interest to many
people
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. From my point of view, I completely agree with the view that they do deserve
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 high paying salaries.
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, to become famous, whether in the sports industry or the movie industry, takes a
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 of hard work.
One
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 must train for years and years to make it to the level of a professional. Not only is
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 exhausting but, it
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 costs a
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 of
money
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. If
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 hopes to reach the level of a superstar, he or she must spend
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 on training and bettering himself or herself.
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 is not an easy lifestyle and requires dedication, which many
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 do not have.
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, these stars deserve to make a
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 of
money
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 because they must give up their privacy to serve the public. As soon as stars leave their homes, they are subjected to constantly being pestered by
people
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 who want their autographs or want to take pictures of them. Famous
people
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 must undergo intense scrutiny from the media. Television and newspaper reporters take note of every action these
people
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 do and publicize it.
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,
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 is a difficult lifestyle to lead, as
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 must constantly be careful of what
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 says in public.
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, working in these industries means that
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 was born with natural talent. They have possessed a skill that very few others own. If there were no
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 in society who could play
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 a role, the entertainment industry would quickly fall into oblivion. We need these
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's skills to entertain us. In conclusion, I think that famous athletes and movie stars deserve their pay. While it seems like too much
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 when we
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 hear how much they make, after careful consideration, we realize that they must put a
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 of work into their careers, much more than ordinary
people
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 do in many cases.
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